The Pencil’s Philosophy—From Questions to Stories: A Writer’s Journey

THE PENCIL'S PHILOSOPHY - THURSDAYS
Welcome to The Pencil's Philosophy, my Thursday focus on writing as transformation. Here you'll explore how writing connects to deeper understanding, how questioning leads to growth, and how stories transform both writer and reader. Whether you're seeking truth or finding your voice, these posts guide your journey of discovery.

My journey from certain answers to courageous questions began with a pencil and a blank page. After sixty years of accepting inherited truths, I discovered that writing fiction opened doors to deeper understanding.

Writing demands honesty. When crafting characters, we can’t hide behind comfortable assumptions. Our characters must face hard truths, make difficult choices, and question everything—just as we must do in our own journey of growth.

Today, working on my twelfth novel, I’ve learned that authentic stories emerge from authentic questioning. Each time my characters face a crisis of belief, confront uncomfortable truths, or challenge accepted wisdom, they’re exploring the same territory I navigated in my transformation from CPA and attorney to novelist and story coach.

Three Truths About Writing and Growth:

1. Questions Lead to Stories

Every powerful story starts with “What if?” When we dare to question our assumptions, we find characters doing the same. Their journeys mirror our own search for truth.

2. Stories Lead to Understanding

Through fiction, we explore different perspectives, challenge our beliefs, and discover new ways of seeing the world. Our characters teach us as much as we teach them.

3. Understanding Leads to Growth

As our characters evolve through their stories, we evolve through our writing. Each draft becomes a step in our own transformation.

Your Story Journey:

Whether you’re writing your first novel or your twelfth, embrace the questions that arise. Let your characters challenge comfortable beliefs. Trust that your story will lead you to deeper understanding.

“We write to taste life twice, in the moment and in retrospect.”

– Anaïs Nin

Remember: The truest stories come from the courage to question everything.

Note: If this is your first appointment, you do not have to pay. I offer a FREE—initial consultation.

First Edge—Starting Your Novel: Three Simple Scenes

Think you can’t write a novel? Let’s start with three manageable scenes. No pressure, no rules – just writing.

Scene One: The Mirror Moment

Write a character looking in a mirror, but they’ve just made a decision that will change their life. It could be small (cutting their hair) or significant (leaving their job).

Example:

“Emma traced the new wrinkles around her eyes, wondering if anyone at work had noticed. The resignation letter in her purse felt heavier than two pages should.”

Scene Two: The Coffee Scene

Two people share coffee. Something needs to be said, but neither wants to say it.

Example:

“David stirred his coffee for the third time, watching the cream swirl. Across the table, Sarah shredded her napkin into neat squares, not looking up.”

Scene Three: The Small Decision

Your character makes a seemingly minor choice that feels enormous to them.

Example:

“The red shoes gleamed in the display window. Lisa checked her watch – already late for the meeting. The sensible black pumps sat in her shopping bag, receipt neatly folded. She hadn’t worn red shoes since…”

Writing Tips:

– Set a timer: 15 minutes per scene

– Don’t edit while writing

– Focus on character feelings

– Trust your instincts

Share your scenes in the comments, or schedule a Story Discovery Session to discuss your writing journey.

“The scariest moment is always just before you start.”

– Stephen King

Remember: Every novelist started with a single scene. Today, it’s your turn.

Note: If this is your first appointment, you do not have to pay. I offer a FREE—initial consultation.

Edge Coach—First Pages: What Story Coaches Look For

As a Fictionary Certified StoryCoach Editor, I often see beginning novelists struggle with their opening pages. Today, let’s explore what makes those crucial first pages work—and what might be holding yours back.

Let’s start with an example:

Weak Opening: “Sarah Jones had always loved the ocean. Growing up in coastal Maine, she spent summers watching waves crash against rocky shores while dreaming of adventure.” Why it doesn’t work: Background instead of story

Strong Opening: “Sarah’s hand trembled as she gripped the ship’s radio. Three hours into her first solo sailing trip, and the storm warnings changed everything.” Why it works: Character in action, immediate tension

Key Elements Story Coaches Evaluate:

  1. Opening Hook
  • Does your first sentence create curiosity?
  • Are readers immediately engaged?
  • Does something happen or change? Common Issue: Starting with background instead of story momentum
  1. Point of View (POV)
  • Is your viewpoint character clear?
  • Are we grounded in their perspective?
  • Do we experience the scene through their senses? Common Issue: Shifting perspectives or distant narration
  1. Character Introduction
  • Do we meet your protagonist in action?
  • Are they facing a challenge or decision?
  • Do readers have a reason to care? Common Issue: Character descriptions without purpose
  1. Story Question
  • What makes readers wonder what happens next?
  • Which story questions emerge naturally?
  • Is there clear tension or conflict? Common Issue: No compelling reason to turn the page

FICTIONARY KEY ELEMENTS: Using Fictionary’s storytelling elements, I evaluate:

  1. Opening Scene Function
  • Introduces main character
  • Establishes tone
  • Sets story in motion
  • Creates story questions
  1. Scene Entry Point
  • Character doing something
  • Clear setting anchors
  • Immediate conflict
  • Sensory details
  1. Scene Tension
  • External pressure
  • Internal conflict
  • Time constraints
  • Stakes matter
  1. Character Goal
  • Clear motivation
  • Visible actions
  • Specific obstacle
  • Meaningful outcome

EVALUATION EXERCISE:

  1. Read your first page aloud
  2. Mark with different colors:
    • Character actions (blue)
    • Background info (red)
    • Dialogue (green)
    • Setting details (yellow)
    • Internal thoughts (purple)

Analysis Questions:

  • Which color dominates?
  • Where does true story action begin?
  • When do readers first care?
  • What makes them want more?

Coming Soon: Watch for more professional editing insights in future Edge Coach posts, where we’ll explore:

  • Transforming weak openings
  • Layering in background naturally
  • Building organic tension
  • Creating compelling hooks

Need help evaluating your first pages now? Schedule a First Chapter Focus session to get professional guidance on starting your novel strong.

You’re invited to schedule a consultation.

Note: If this is your first appointment, you do not have to pay. I offer a FREE—initial consultation.

Sharpening the Edge—Layering Character Backstory: Scene 13A Revelations

Current progress:

Deep in phase one edits of Novel 12, today I tackled Scene 13A: Doubts in Action. My goal? Adding crucial layers to Alexis’s backstory that drive her current decisions.

Craft Challenge:

Adding backstory without disrupting the scene momentum presents a common writer’s dilemma. Too much explanation kills pacing; too little leaves readers disconnected. The key lies in weaving past details through present action.

Writing Insight:

This morning’s breakthrough came through action-reaction sequencing. Instead of explaining Alexis’s history, I let her reactions to current events reveal her past. Each choice she makes hints at previous experiences, layering her character while maintaining scene tension.

Try this technique:

1. Identify a character decision

2. Link it to past experience

3. Show the connection through reaction, not explanation

4. Keep the story moving forward

For example, when Alexis questioned Pastor Josh and he gave her the standard “God works in mysterious ways” response, her hesitation revealed more about her history than a full paragraph of explanation could.

Remember: Strong characters aren’t built through exposition—they’re revealed through action.

You’re invited to schedule a consultation to discuss your character development challenges.

Note: If this is your first appointment, you do not have to pay. I offer a FREE—initial consultation.

December 1st: The Pencil’s Edge Begins Its New Chapter

Welcome to the transformed Pencil’s Edge! As someone who wrote his first novel at age 60 and is now working on number twelve, I understand both the courage it takes to begin and the guidance needed to finish. Today marks an exciting evolution in my ability to help others on their writing journey – I’m now a Fictionary Certified StoryCoach Editor, focusing exclusively on helping beginning novelists find their voice and strengthen their stories.

Whether you have just a spark of an idea or a complete first draft, The Pencil’s Edge is here to support your journey through five focused categories:

Sharpening the Edge

Join me in real time as I share insights from writing my current novel. You’ll see the challenges, breakthroughs, and solutions as they happen. Currently working through Chapter 17, I’ll show you exactly how I handle scene structure, character development, and plot momentum.

Edge Coach

As a Fictionary Certified StoryCoach Editor, I’ll share professional insights into story structure, character development, and scene crafting. From your first scene to your final chapter, learn techniques that will strengthen your writing and engage your readers.

First Edge

Specifically designed for beginning writers, this category offers encouragement, practical guidance, and permission to write imperfectly. Remember, every novelist – even those with dozens of books – had to write their first scene. Let’s start yours.

The Pencil’s Philosophy

Writing is more than a craft – it’s a journey of discovery. Here, we’ll explore how writing connects to deeper understanding, how questioning leads to growth, and how stories can transform both writer and reader.

Edge of Reality

Our monthly feature examines current events through a writer’s lens. We’ll explore how real-world stories can inform our fiction and deepen our understanding of both craft and human nature.

New Content Schedule:

– Monday: Craft and insight posts

– Wednesday: Story coaching and technique

– Friday: Beginning writer focus and encouragement

What This Means for You:

1. Regular, focused content to support your writing journey

2. Professional guidance for your first novel

3. Community support and encouragement

4. Clear path from idea to completion

Ready to Begin?

Schedule a free consultation to discuss your story ideas. Whether you’re just thinking about writing or ready to start your first chapter, let’s talk about how I can help you begin your journey.

Join me in embracing The Pencil Driven Life – where writing becomes a path to discovery, growth, and authentic expression.

Your fellow writer,

Richard

Preparing for Tomorrow’s Journey

As we transition from sharing my novels to helping you write yours, I’m taking this moment to prepare for tomorrow’s first post under our new format. The Pencil’s Edge will now focus on practical guidance, professional insights, and encouragement for beginning novelists.

Tomorrow, we’ll explore what it means to start your writing journey, drawing from my experience of writing that first novel at age 60. Whether you have just an idea or a partially written manuscript, I look forward to sharing both the craft and courage needed to write your story.

Join me tomorrow as we begin this new chapter together. After all, every writer’s journey begins with a single mark on the page.

Evolution of The Pencil’s Edge Blog

For the past year, I’ve shared daily chapters from my novels, allowing you to experience my storytelling journey. Today marks a significant change as I transition my blog, now called The Pencil’s Edge, to focus on helping others write their stories.

As a newly certified Fictionary StoryCoach Editor, I’m excited to transform this space into a resource for beginning novelists. Instead of sharing my past works, I’ll be offering:

  • Real-time insights from my current novel writing
  • Professional story coaching guidance
  • Beginning writer encouragement
  • Writing craft development
  • Monthly explorations of story through current events

For those following “The Boaz Scholar,” you can read the first ten chapters here. The complete novel, along with my other works, remain available here, and at Amazon.

This change aligns with my commitment to helping others write their first novel. After completing eleven novels and beginning my twelfth, I’m ready to share not just my stories, but the craft and courage needed to write them.

Thank you for your understanding during this transition. I’m excited to help you write your own stories.

Novel Excerpts—The Boaz Scholar, Chapter 2

The primary aim of the "Novel Excerpts" blog category is to showcase my creative writing, specifically from the novels I've written. Hopefully, these posts will provide a glimpse into my storytelling style, themes, and narrative skills. It's an opportunity to share my artistic expressions and the worlds I've created through my novels.  
The Boaz Scholar, written in 2019, is my eighth novel. I'll post a chapter a day over the next few weeks. 

Book Blurb

Precocious Chicago teenager Mia Hudson is growing up to love the marvels of science.  But, a one-year move to Boaz, Alabama reveals a world trapped in another age, one filled with Christian fundamentalists and female jealousy.  
After agreeing to tutor star football player Adam Brown, Mia is brutally assaulted.  The attack in the girls’ P.E. dressing room leaves Mia with nightmares of dying and a steeled determination to bring her five female attackers to justice.

This is before she started falling for the stunningly handsome Adam Brown, and before chief instigator and preacher’s kid Jessica Miller is kidnapped by a rapist/murdering parolee.

Read this story to learn how Mia uses her love for humanity and her scholarly mind to solve a thousand-piece puzzle while local law enforcement is just opening the box.  

And to experience a once-in-life teenage love story.

Chapter 2

It was nearly midnight before we arrived in Boaz.  After bringing in my two heavy suitcases, Uncle Larry went to bed.  Aunt Mary helped me unpack.  My room was small but comfortable.  It was also amenable to my reading and study habits.  Uncle Larry had built me a desk across the interior wall right next to the door from the hallway.  Above the long wood counter, there were plenty of shelves.  It was nice to see the books I had shipped.  I imagined each of them calling to me, reaching out a hand and saying, “Choose me.”  I slowly slid my right hand across the spine of each book and silently told them how excited I was they were here to share our one-year adventure.

I had forgotten this bedroom had a private bath.  Last night as I was brushing my teeth, I opened the shower door and realized I could barely squeeze inside.  There certainly was no way to bend over and wash my feet without bumping my head against the wall.  But this was better than having to share Uncle Larry’s and Aunt Mary’s bath down the hall in the center of the house.  It was odd the small clothes closet was inside the bathroom.

The room’s furniture was minimalist but enough: a half-bed, a nightstand, and a chest of drawers.  The stout but aged items looked like they could have been what Mother and Aunt Mary shared when they were growing up in the country outside Boaz.  There was also a small rocking chair by the lone back window.  The thing I disliked the most was the carpet.  It was the contrast with the wood floors throughout our two-story home in Hyde Park that kept me awake for hours after undressing and crawling into my bed.  It was nearly three o’clock the last time I looked at my iPhone.  I couldn’t survive thinking about Chicago.  I had to resolve to live in the here and now, no matter how much I already hated the sad and scary turn my life had taken.

“Mia.”  Aunt Mary said, tapping on my door.  It was 6:30 according to the giant, old-time clock hanging above my chest of drawers.  I hadn’t noticed it last night.

“Yes.”  I stayed vertical under the covers realizing my habit of sleeping naked might have to change.

“Your Mom and Dad are on the phone.  They asked me to fetch you.”

“Okay, I’ll be right there, give me a minute.”  I quickly pulled on a tee shirt and a pair of baggy shorts.  I was confused as to why they hadn’t called me on my iPhone.  I walked down the short hallway and into the small den by the kitchen.

“There, sit in my chair.”  Aunt Mary said motioning me towards a chair next to a sliding glass door leading out onto a small deck.  The giant phone sat on a table between two matching Lazy-Boy recliners.  “Your mother called to thank me and your Uncle Larry.”

“Mom?”  I said.

“Honey, are you okay?  Did everything go well yesterday?”

“No problems.  We got here around midnight.  I didn’t sleep very well.  New surroundings, I guess.  Are you and Dad still in London?”  For some reason I was confused.  Was today Saturday or Sunday?  I also couldn’t remember when the final leg of Mom and Dad’s flight would be.

“We’re here until tomorrow,”  Dad said.  I assumed they had their phone on Speaker.

“Hey, Dad.  I miss you guys.  Also, I’m afraid I made a mistake.  I wish I were with you right now and was headed to Johannesburg tomorrow.”  I had heard Aunt Mary go out the door to the carport.  Without any sign of Uncle Larry, I suspected he had already left to meet his teaching buddy for golf.

“We miss you too.”  Mother and Dad said in unison.  I was blessed with great parents.  I had enough friends whose parents were just as smart as mine but appeared incapable of truly connecting with their kids like it was not intellectual or something.  But mine were special.  I liked that they didn’t coddle me.  They had taught me since I was a baby to think for myself.  Both Mother and Dad were professors at the University of Chicago.  Dad, a professor of evolutionary genetics in the Department of Ecology & Evolution.  Mother, a professor of New Testament and Early Christian Literature in the Divinity School.

“What time is it in London?”  I knew they would be several hours ahead of my time.

“Right now, it’s a little after noon,”  Dad said.

“What are you guys up to?”  I said, remembering our trip to London in 2015. 

 Mom spoke.  I could sense she was excited by her tone and rate of speech.  “We’re headed to the Shard for lunch.  We have reservations at 1:00.” 

“Thanks for inviting me.”  More memories.  We visited this beautiful skyscraper during our trip.  It’s on the south bank of the River Thames and is the tallest building in Western Europe.

“Oh honey.  This is no doubt the hardest thing your Dad and I have ever done.  We miss you so much.”

“We have to stay focused,”  Dad said.

“Discipline Dad.  You can do it.  It’s just a year.  We’ll be stronger and smarter for sticking with the plan.”  I repeated his words, what he had said for months, each night the three of us were planning this adventure.

“Honey, you remember The Shanghai Bar at Hutong?”  Mother interrupted.

“I do.  The thirty-third floor of the Shard.  I also remember eating chilled and roasted baby pigeon.  It was a starter we shared when we ate there.  I think that was the final straw that made me become a vegan.”

Dad changed the subject.  He and Mother had different opinions on my decision to give up meat and dairy.  I guess he didn’t want to re-plow that ground.  At least not today.

“We spoke with Lee this morning.  Neil arrived yesterday.  They seem anxious for us to arrive.  Tuesday, we head to the caves.”  Dad seemed more excited than ever. 

“Reckon you and Mom will become as famous as Mr. Berger and Neil?”  I asked.   I had recently become infatuated with both men and had read extensively on their backgrounds and accomplishments.

Lee Berger is an American-born South African paleoanthropologist, a professor at the University of the Witwatersrand in Johannesburg, South Africa, and a National Geographic Explorer-in-Residence.  He is best known for his discovery in 2015 of Homo Naledi at Rising Star Cave just thirty miles north of the school.  Berger determined that Homo Naledi is an extinct species of hominin.

Neil Shubin is also a professor at the University of Chicago and a good friend of Mom and Dad’s.  Neil is a paleontologist, evolutionary biologist, and popular science writer who is best known for co-discovering Tiktaalik roseae, a transitional fossil, in the Arctic of Canada.  This fossil reveals a combination of features that show the evolutionary transition between swimming fish and their descendants, the four-legged vertebrates which include amphibians, dinosaurs, birds, mammals, and humans. 

When I was in the right frame of mind, I knew this was a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity for Mom and Dad.  They were joining Berger and Shubin as they returned to the Rising Star Cave system for the second exploration.  From what Berger had written, he expected more exciting discoveries to be made, possibly as important as the Homo Naledi find.

“Baby, we are content to be in the background and support the team any way we can.  It’ll be an honor just to serve water to these extraordinary men.”

Mom and Dad talked and walked until they arrived at the Shard.  Dad ended our conversation by saying, “Mia, take it one day at a time and realize the world is home to all types of people.  Don’t get discouraged when you hear someone boldly proclaiming his ignorance.  We all have lots to learn.”

After the three of us shared an “I love you,” I sat in Aunt Mary’s chair feeling sorry for myself.  I couldn’t help but stare at her Bible sitting on the end table.  I picked it up and turned to the page where she had inserted a First Baptist Church of Christ bulletin.  Underlined in pencil was Philippians 4:13: “I can do all things through Christ which strengtheneth me.”  At first, I chuckled to myself as I thought how silly it was for anyone to believe in God, or His purported son, Jesus Christ, for that matter.  Then, I realized the important thing wasn’t whether God’s existence was true, but what Aunt Mary and Uncle Larry believed.  No doubt, they believed Jesus lived in their hearts and helped them day by day to do their work and live their lives.

“Your mom and dad seem excited.”  Aunt Mary said, coming in the sliding glass door with a basket full of the prettiest tomatoes I had ever seen.

Novel Excerpts—The Boaz Scholar, Chapter 1

The primary aim of the "Novel Excerpts" blog category is to showcase my creative writing, specifically from the novels I've written. Hopefully, these posts will provide a glimpse into my storytelling style, themes, and narrative skills. It's an opportunity to share my artistic expressions and the worlds I've created through my novels.  
The Boaz Scholar, written in 2019, is my eighth novel. I'll post a chapter a day over the next few weeks. 

Book Blurb

Precocious Chicago teenager Mia Hudson is growing up to love the marvels of science.  But, a one-year move to Boaz, Alabama reveals a world trapped in another age, one filled with Christian fundamentalists and female jealousy.  
After agreeing to tutor star football player Adam Brown, Mia is brutally assaulted.  The attack in the girls’ P.E. dressing room leaves Mia with nightmares of dying and a steeled determination to bring her five female attackers to justice.

This is before she started falling for the stunningly handsome Adam Brown, and before chief instigator and preacher’s kid Jessica Miller is kidnapped by a rapist/murdering parolee.

Read this story to learn how Mia uses her love for humanity and her scholarly mind to solve a thousand-piece puzzle while local law enforcement is just opening the box.  

And to experience a once-in-life teenage love story.

Chapter 1

“Mountain Brook, here I come.”  The red-faced, blue-haired older woman said as she stuffed a red and white bag into the overhead bin and sat down across the aisle from me.  I hated not having a window seat.

“We’ll be in Birmingham in less than two hours.  You going or coming?”  Now the overly plump woman was looking directly at me.  I was regretting my decision to read instead of listening to music, which required having my ear-buds in while waiting for everyone to board.  I returned my gaze to The Blank Slate by Steven Pinker, one of my favorite writers, although I’d read this book half a dozen times.  “Birmingham, you live there?”  I kept my eyes on my reading.

 I was saved by a short and stocky man and a similarly shaped woman directing half a dozen kids to their seats, two in the row in front of me, two beside the blue-haired woman, and two more somewhere towards the rear of the plane.  I had to get up and stand in the aisle as the man in an Alabama Crimson Tide football jersey moved by toward the coveted window seat and the big-bosomed woman squeezed in next to my temporary residence.

As other passengers boarded. I sneaked a peak across the aisle to the chatty old woman.  She was now sitting silent, with her head bowed, with what looked like a Bible lying across her lap.  It was large.  Probably a King James Version.  The thought almost made me sick.

My near-perfect life was headed south.  Literally.  My flight from Chicago O’Hare to Birmingham was one-way.  To silently answer the blue-haired woman’s first question, I was going, not coming.  And, I was staying a full year.  What was worse, I wasn’t headed to Mountain Brook, a quiet and rich suburb of what once was known as ‘the Pittsburgh of the South,’ a community I suspected possessed a thin layer of sophistication.  No, I was going to Boaz, a little backwoods town eighty miles north.  Worse still, I couldn’t simply hang out at Uncle Larry and Aunt Mary’s. I had to waste my entire tenth-grade year at Boaz High School.

“You live in Birmingham?”  Damn, now questions were erupting from my right, from the thick woman whose left elbow already controlled the armrest.

“No.”  I reached under my seat for my leather bag and my iPhone.  It didn’t take but a minute to discover I had packed my earbuds in one of two suitcases.  Both, now in the belly of the plane.

“Are you visiting family, and friends, or headed further south?”  I couldn’t decide which was worse.  The woman’s southern drawl or her overpowering perfume.  Her speech reminded me it had been my decision to stay with Mother’s sister and her husband, both of whose words were painfully slow, instead of spending a year with my parents living out of a tent in south Africa.

Maybe if I responded, she would leave me alone.  “Just visiting family.”  See, I could be polite, and it was all true.

“My six young’uns start to school on Monday.  You still in high school?  Right?  My Tammie’s about your age.  Thirteen?”  The woman was a machine gun, albeit a slow one with an endless number of bullets. 

“I’m fifteen.”  The irritating woman obviously hadn’t taken a good look at me, even though I had stood to let her, and her man take their seats.  I am tall, nearly five foot eight, weigh one-hundred twenty-eight pounds and wear a 36D bra.  And in these tight jeans, she could have noticed I’m shapely all the way to my toes.  I almost shared with her what Jordan, my ex-boyfriend, had always said: “You have the sexiest ass,” but that would have been an equally painful subject to explore.  Jordan, not my ass.

“I can’t believe Tammy’s startin’ the eighth grade.  She’s already demanding I let her start dating.  That’s not happening.  Too many like Roger out there.”  The purple-lip-sticked woman motioned her head toward the man sitting beside her.  I wished I hadn’t looked.  Dear Roger was leaning forward staring at my chest, smiling, and probably wishing I was exposing more cleavage.  He could use a good dentist. 

Ten minutes later the plane’s tires left the tarmac and headed towards 40,000 feet.  I now knew the names of all six of Darla and Roger’s kids, that they lived in Clanton, Alabama, that Roger owned a tire store, and that she worked part-time at SmartStyle Hair Salon at the local Walmart Super Center.

Boaz, Alabama, here I come.

Delta flight 2489 landed at Birmingham-Shuttlesworth International Airport at 9:19 p.m., Friday night August the third.  Uncle Larry and Aunt Mary were waiting just inside the terminal.  She was holding a silly little sign that read, “Mia Hudson, welcome to Alabama.”

It wasn’t like I’d never set foot in the second most uneducated state in America.  But it had been over two years since my parents and I had driven through during one of our annual summer vacations.  That one, was the summer of 2016, two days after I had graduated seventh grade at Latin School of Chicago.  We had stayed two days at their home straight across from Boaz High School.  I still remember Mother saying, as we pulled out heading to Miami, “Mia, being naturally smart isn’t enough.  Just look at your Aunt Mary.  She made 34 on her ACT exam in the eleventh grade but she now makes $25,000 per year as a secretary for a church.  Good decisions are imperative.”

“Hey,” I said, as Aunt Mary hugged me while Uncle Larry smiled and touched my shoulder.

“Mia, we’re excited to finally have a daughter.  At least for a year.”  Aunt Mary said, leaning her head back as she held both my hands even though my right one clutched my book bag.  Her eyes scanned me from chest to feet.  “Wow, you’ve filled out since we saw you two years ago.”  Mother’s only sister, Mary Jackson, childless, worked as the secretary for Minister of Music Mike Glenn at First Baptist Church of Christ in Boaz.  She also volunteered with the youth group, mainly managing refreshments.

“Thanks for letting me come.  I promise I’ll not cause you any trouble.”  I was being fully honest.  After making my decision, I made plans to make the most of this year.  At first, I was devastated when I realized I would lose a year at one of the finest college prep schools in the country, and possibly the chance to earn a full academic scholarship to the University of Chicago.  It was my dream to someday be a professor at this prestigious college where my parents had taught and researched all my life.  My plan, evidenced by two boxes of books already in my room at 711 Stephens Street in Boaz, was self-education.  I figured Boaz High School wouldn’t be much of a challenge, so I would immerse myself in dozens of biology and psychology books by the world’s most brilliant minds, including Steven Pinker at Harvard.

“Let’s go grab your bags and head home.  It’s already going on 9:30.”  Uncle Larry said taking my book bag and walking toward the escalators.  Mother had reminded me yesterday when she was giving me last-minute instructions before she and Dad left for the Rising Star Cave system in South Africa, that Uncle Larry went to bed early, especially during the school week.  He was a math teacher at Boaz High School.  I was glad the counselor had let me opt out of Geometry since I had taken it in the ninth grade.  It would have been awkward living with your math teacher.  

  On the drive to Boaz, Uncle Larry conceded to Aunt Mary’s request that he go through the drive-through at a McDonald’s in Roebuck, a place just north of Birmingham right off Interstate 59.  She had wanted us to go inside and eat but he wouldn’t surrender that much, something about needing to be up early to finish his next week’s lesson plans before a golf game with Stanley Smothers, the recently hired math teacher that needed some hand-holding according to Uncle Larry.

After eating my fish sandwich and spilling ketchup from my fries onto my jeans, I was kind of glad Aunt Mary addressed the elephant in the room, well, the car.  The one major stipulation she and Uncle Larry had when Mother had asked them if I could live with them for a year was that I attend church with them.  At first, this didn’t seem to be a big deal.  I had attended church all my life.  It was Temple Sholom of Chicago, a Jewish synagogue my parents had fallen in love with shortly after they moved from New York in the fall of 2001.  Neither Mom or Dad were religious.  They simply loved the fellowship and, as Dad said, “You don’t have to adopt the Jewish beliefs to benefit from Judaism. It’s a good way to structure your life; a good place to learn discipline.”

After Mother described Uncle Larry and Aunt Mary’s religion, my feelings changed.  I had done some reading on Christian Fundamentalism, and especially the Southern Baptist denomination.  I had even researched the First Baptist Church of Christ.  It was going to be difficult keeping my mouth shut for an hour each week as I would hear the preacher, a man named Robert Miller, share his interpretation of a book he and 99.99% of his constituents believed had been authored by the Creator of the Universe. 

As we exited the Interstate at Highway 77 our church attendance conversation took a darker turn.  Uncle Larry spoke for the first time in fifty miles.  “Wednesday night’s services and fellowship meal will expose you to the best Southern food imaginable and to the power of prayer.  Sunday morning’s Sunday School will motivate you to immerse yourself in the New Testament.  Jews stop right before the good part.”  I could see Aunt Mary smiling as Uncle Larry pulled into a well-light Chevron station to “filler-up” as he said.

As he was outside pumping gas Aunt Mary said, “Oh, I almost forgot.  I’ve arranged a little party for you tomorrow night.  It’s kind of a welcome to Boaz party.  It’ll be a good chance for you to meet several kids from the youth group, your Boaz High School classmates.”

That’s all I needed, being put in the spotlight of a bunch of snaggle-toothed, slow-talking backwoods kids who all believed in talking snakes and other magic I couldn’t even imagine.   

“Thanks, Aunt Mary.  I can’t wait.”

Novel Excerpts—The Boaz Safecracker, Epilogue

The primary aim of the "Novel Excerpts" blog category is to showcase my creative writing, specifically from the novels I've written. Hopefully, these posts will provide a glimpse into my storytelling style, themes, and narrative skills. It's an opportunity to share my artistic expressions and the worlds I've created through my novels.  
The Boaz Safecracker, written in 2019, is my seventh novel. I'll post a chapter a day over the next few weeks.

Book Blurb

Fred Martin, a 1972 graduate of Boaz High School, returns to his hometown after practicing law and living in Huntsville for over thirty-five years with two goals in mind.  First, to distance himself from the loss of Susan, his wife of thirty-seven years who died in 2013 of cancer.  And second, to partner with his lifelong friend, Noah Waters, to crack the safes of Elton Rawlins and Doug Barber, two men who got under their skin as high school football players.

Little did Fred and Noah realize the secrets the two old Mosler safes protected.  Who murdered three Boaz High School seniors in the fall of 1973?  Is a near-half-century-old plan to destroy Fred’s sister and steal the inheritance from a set of 44-year-old illegitimate twins still alive and well?  How far would Fred’s mother go to protect her family?   

What starts out as an almost innocent prank turns life-threateningly serious the more Fred learns and the more safes he cracks. All the while, he falls in love with Connie Stewart, his one-date high school classmate who may conceal a secret or two herself.

Epilogue

It was almost a month before Deidre invited me to lunch at Martin Mansion.  She now was a very rich woman.  Even though her attorney, Dalton Martin, was still knee-deep in sorting out Miss Mossie’s estate, there was no longer any doubt Deidre was entitled to half the Mosler fortune.  I suppose one could say she and Ed were even richer by my own generosity.  Friday afternoon I had signed over my interest in Martin Mansion to Deidre in exchange for a deed to my little cabin and the back forty as Dad always called it. 

The first Sunday lunch around Mother’s giant dining room table wasn’t anything akin to what was ingrained in everyone present.  Even Tyler, who had been virtually adopted by Deidre and Ed, expressed an accurate interpretation of the out-of-focus feel we all were experiencing: “Is it me, or is the room tilted away from Papa Martin’s chair.”  Initially, she was reluctant but then insisted I sit in Dad’s head-of-the-table chair.  I vigorously declined and suggested Luke take the helm.  After a lively discussion with Ed firmly acknowledging his lack of Martin blood flowing through his veins, all acquiesced and the young Luke Martin Sullivan moved from my left to my right and semi-confidently accepted his post.   It was almost like changing the guard at Buckingham Palace.

After a meal, including a respectable bowl of Mother-similar green beans and a less-acceptable coconut cake, I declined to join everyone out on the front porch.  I had already decided I would, but it was Luke and Tyler’s invitation to join them at Martin Pond that provided a face-saving exit.

“Uncle Fred, do you think Papa Martin is in Heaven?”  It was the same question he had asked me after Mother died.  I was sitting in Dad’s chair underneath the old oak on the east side of the pond.  At first, I didn’t understand Luke’s question.  He was a quarter of the way around the pond, following a casting Tyler who had already made it to the pond’s dam.

“He is if that’s what you decide to believe.”  I really didn’t want to talk about Dad.  I was just now regaining the respect I had always had for the man who sacrificed his freedom away from Martin Mansion to return and care for 90 plus year old Stonewall Martin, the ancestor I most resembled, according to Mother.

“What the heck does that mean?”  Luke said moving slowly back towards me pulling his fishing line along the edge of the pond.

“Let me ask you a question.  What would your dear mother say in response to your original question?”

Luke didn’t hesitate, “she’d say Papa Martin was not only in Heaven right now but was walking streets of gold, that he and Mama Martin had their own mansion along one of those streets.”

“I have no doubt you are correct.  Now, what do you think, what does your logical mind reveal?” 

Luke was now within five feet of me and laid down his rod and reel.  “My heart wants to believe Papa Martin is young again and happy to be with the love of his life, but my head tells me there’s a fly in the ointment.”

I guess old sayings are still being passed down one generation to the next.  “Why do you say that?”  I wanted Luke to develop the rare ability to not only think but also to express why he reached a certain conclusion.

“The facts tell me that I saw him lying in his casket.  No matter what the morticians had done to make him look good, it was all makeup, not even skin deep.  Papa’s mind and heart were dead, just like every other cell in his body.  It’s absolutely absurd to believe that his mind, soul, whatever you call it, simply floated away to Heaven after he took his last breath.”

“You’re correct.  But Luke, back to what I said earlier.  Most folks that you know believe what they’ve been taught to believe.  They truly don’t think for themselves.  God forbid they conduct an honest and thorough investigation into the actual evidence.”

“If they did, what would they find?”  Luke was listening.  His was an excellent question.

“They should find no real evidence for the existence of a god at all.  And, certainly not for the Christian Jesus of the New Testament, or of God, Yahweh, of the Old Testament.  Undoubtedly, they would argue two things.  The Bible proves their God and His son Jesus, and second, they would contend everything you see, all of nature, throughout the physical world, proves there has to be a god, really, their Christian God.”

“You’ve already explained to me, understandably I might add, how the Bible is simply man-made.  But, after hearing Pastor Robert this morning preaching on creation and how everything clearly revealed God’s handiwork, His design, you know, it makes some sense.  Luke and I had exchanged places.  He was now sitting in Dad’s chair.  I was using Luke’s line to cast for a big bass.  I really wanted to join Tyler on the other side of the pond.

“Think of it as a trap.  It’s called the argument from improbability.  Believers think it is an ace up their sleeve.  Actually, it works against their position.”

“I’m not sure I understand.”

“Christians argue that ‘the probability of life originating on Earth is no greater than the chance that a hurricane, sweeping through a scrapyard, would have the luck to assemble a Boeing 747.”  I said virtually quoting what Richard Dawkins had written in The God Delusion.

“I’m really confused now.  What you just said sounds very true.”

“You’re right.  It is very true.  What’s missing is that the argument rests on a false premise.  I mean, one had to assume life here on earth came about by chance.  Evolution isn’t about random chance.  It’s about natural selection.  Here’s the Christian’s real problem buried inside their argument from improbability.  They contend for creation, creation by design.  That there must be a designer.  But, as my hero Dawkins writes, ‘God is the Ultimate Boeing 747.’”

Luke stood and picked up the rod I had laid beside Dad’s chair.  “Oh, I see, or I think so.  If something so complex as life on earth could not come about simply by chance, and instantly if you believe in the Genesis story, then God Himself is just as improbable.  Right?”  I appreciated Luke’s concentration.  He, and I assumed Tyler on the other side of the pond now pulling in a nice bass, gave me hope others could lay aside mythical beliefs.

“Good job Luke.  Where Christians stumble is to think there are only two choices for life to exist.  One being mere chance and the other design.  I want you to learn there is normally at least one more question you need to ask.  Here, it’s simply, ‘is there another option?’  The answer is yes.  It’s called evolution: from simple to complex; life has evolved.  Dawkins calls it ‘graded ramps of slowly increasing complexity.”  I encourage you to do some serious reading on evolution.”

Luke looked over at me and said, “so, I take it you don’t believe Papa Martin is in Heaven?”

“No, I don’t believe it.  Of course, I don’t know he’s not there, but it seems highly improbable given what we know from science.  One thing I do firmly believe is that for the God of the Bible to exist He couldn’t have always existed as an all-powerful, all-knowing, and all-loving being.  He would have had to come about by some long, long process of evolving from a very simple state, likely over millions of years, into the God as described throughout the Bible.”

“Uncle Fred, you got one.  Pull.  Even though my eyes were open I hadn’t seen or felt the end of my rod bending forward.  I quickly began to reel and hold my line taut.  “Careful, you may have the Beast.”  Luke kept shouting.

Sometimes little things, like the fish I caught, pack a powerful message.  When I first saw the half-pound bass floundering in the edge of the water, my decision was made.  Ever since Dad’s funeral I had contemplated returning to Huntsville and my desk at King and Hart.  I had talked to both Bart and Jeff twice each over the past four weeks.  I now realized I was tired of pursuing the Beast, one I never would fully capture.  I wanted to explain to Luke how easy it was to get distracted from what really mattered.  Even though I would always be a Martin, I didn’t have to live in Boaz. 

As I thought, I wandered around Martin Pond, half-casting, fully happy without snagging the Beast or even another half-pounder.  I could hear Luke explaining the argument from improbability.  I didn’t catch what Tyler said in response, but it spawned a thunderous clap of laughter between the two as they gathered up their fishing gear and started walking back toward Martin Mansion.

I couldn’t help but think of Connie and Susan.  If not for the former I would still have to work.  Now, I could work because I wanted to.  Even though I still didn’t know exactly how I was going to laundry the million dollars she had stolen from First Baptist Church of Christ, I believed there was a way.  At worst, I could call on my friend Colton Mason.  He no doubt would have a few tricks up his sleeves.  My mind found satisfaction in anticipating us renewing our friendship: there was honor among thieves.

Susan, the newly discovered truths about Susan, didn’t require forgiveness.  But, I had forgiven her anyway, thanks to Pastor Robert.  She was not guilty of willingly having sex with Johnny Stewart.  The fact she had kept it a secret from me for her entire life still rubbed me the wrong way.  Truth be known, I had never fully loved anyone but Susan.  Although, things could have been different with Connie if the falling stars hadn’t collided.

I finally wound up back in Dad’s chair under the giant oak.  My thoughts continued to ponder the past four years.  It was almost midnight when I woke up from a deep sleep, still in Dad’s chair.

I left my fishing gear and felt my way back to my cabin under a moonless sky thankful that mine and Susan’s house in Huntsville had not received a single offer in nearly the four years I had it on the market.

I chuckled as I took the two steps onto my porch, and as the thought raced across my mind that someway, somewhere, somebody was looking after me.

Some traditions were impossible to shake.

THE END